Falcon2001 Posted June 30, 2004 Report Posted June 30, 2004 it seems like this is the first time realizing that this isn't just a game have i ever done this before or was it a charade have i danced my way through life on silly strings of my own design deciding that i must have designed christianity just so i could do it my way i wanted to be open minded so i turned a blind eye to the bible i wanted to be accepting so i refused to accept myself i took christianity and picked it apart like a hamburger layer by layer discarding the judgement and the morals and the guidance inside i kept the guilt, though slept with it under my pillow and took it with me everywhere it was my greatest friend so now that i realize i was wrong is this the beginning of something new how can it be re-ligion if this is merely the first time for me
Yuki Kokoro Posted June 30, 2004 Report Posted June 30, 2004 Hey look, two poems at once! I like the contrast of these two poems even though the subject matter is the same. This is a more straightforward and serious look at the topic and it was especially interesting hear how the speaker's view on religion started, "i wanted to be open minded/ so i turned a blind eye to the bible". I think the fifth stanza is my favorite: "i kept the guilt, though/ slept with it under my pillow/ and took it with me everywhere/ it was my greatest friend"; recognizing this is a big step. Interesting that here guilt is mentioned, where in the other poem the speaker claims he wants only "Heaven and charity". Thanks for sharing both of these, it's good to see your writing again.
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