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Victims aren't we all?

Of love, lust and hate.

Victims aren't we all?

No rest till each other we annihilate.

 

Victims aren't we all?

Of suffering and decay

Lying in our beds

Waiting for our death day.

 

Victims aren't we all?

Even when we are happy

Victims of our emotions

We will remain most likely.

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It certainly seems so Arwen. Victim or victimized I am not sure that my personal belief will allow me to accept it as easily as that. Along time ago I would have agreed but something changed somewhere between ten and thirteen years of age. I started to slowly take responsibility to what was happening to me. My choices and my decisions shaped their own consequences. My love was freely given (and freely spurned) and sometimes I got hurt, but not always. Sometimes I just had fun (or the time of my life). If you are taking chances with your eyes closed you could be a victim but not if they are open.

 

Innocent people do get hurt and certainly people can be randomly cruel (and some pure evil). I also realized that these were beyond my power to control so I let someone else worry about those things. Some hard and difficult things will cross our path and life can be so hard. I trust that God will giveme the grace to handle these times and the courage to go on.

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Really enjoyed the repeating of "victims aren't we all" to drive home time and time again. The layout I found grand 'cept for the third verse when you broke the scheme you set up, still, I found it still read fine even without following the scheme you set!

 

There is the mindset that victims choose to be victims, perhaps not intentionally but by the manner in which they act and react to others or to situations.

 

But this verse:

 

Victims aren't we all?

Of suffering and decay

Lying in our beds

Waiting for our death day.

 

...is exceptional. A victim of people or circumstances and situations can overcome that victimization. However, as you so rightly point out, there is one thing that we are all victims to without escape and that is time. It whittles down our bodies and minds (sometimes) and without remorse, it eventually discards us into death. You portrayed this fact very nicely! I would think that verse might actually work better as the last verse but its a mere suggestion and the poem is grand as is.

 

Well done hun *hugs* keep it up :wolf:

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