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You asked me how do I deal

And I told you

I do what I must to stay sane

But what is sanity

I know that insanity

Is when you do something

Over and over again

Expecting different results

Dr. Phil would ask me

How’s that working for ya

In that Texas drawl

And I’d tell him

Not very well

But I’d still sit here

Bored out of my mind

Unable to move

Or find any sort of motivation

Because my world is on

The other side of this screen

And I’m wondering

If maybe we made a mistake

When the only thing

That keeps me going

I can’t have everyday

You feel it too

It distances us more than

The distance that is

Already there

It’s funny how a simple question

Changes your entire

Outlook on a situation

When before that

Question was asked

Everything was simple

And good and there

Wasn’t this constant ache

 

I wonder if we made a mistake.

Posted

I do what I must to stay sane

But what is sanity

an excellent question.

if you find out, let me know, will you?

Posted

Mira's two cents:

 

The short lines conveyed (to me at least) an almost erratic sense of urgency that fit well with the title. I don't know why, but I really enjoyed the way the last two lines rhymed. It seemed to conclude the piece well. In some distant way, this reminds me of a piece that I am currently working on. I think you've just inspired me to finish it.

 

Irrelevant side-note: The question "what is sanity" is one that I have asked myself on numerous occasions.

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*nods* i agree that the short and broken line lengths work well for this. i think they show, in a more concrete form, the broken thought patterns so common with such a circumstance - the way thoughts seem to start and trail off to nothingness, or turn to something else entirely.

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