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A provider, someone to love

someone to provide a hug

A man to teach you and give you tips

A man who knows his place at the table

a man who is strong and loving

generous, willing, and stable.

A man who knows no boundaries of love

someone with opem arms

to shelter you from harm

and who knows your pains and joys

as a man, and from a boy

 

But my father is hard and cruel

I'm a kicking post, he's the mule

not because I feel steadfast

or because he's the ass

but more because he's the torment now

as they were in my past

With every drink he takes, and joke he makes

Is another time I wish my mom had said "no"

But again we'd be on welfare and survival

I'd have everything to steal, and nowhere to go

So now as a man, I know I turned out the best

in spite of a father, who was only a "step"....

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I can see that you must have put a lot of thought into this poem.

 

The division in the stanzas comes as a natural breaking point.

It makes me wonder what you really mean by it.

 

The first stanza, about "a man" who is good, shows everything positive your father has to offer.

The second, however, takes the other path, and shows his negative traits.

This is contrary to the standard, of showing flaws, then redemption, but you pull it off well.

 

The second stanza is stark contrast to the first, and makes the reader wonder if this could really be the same man.

It is an interesting concept of using him as a step, but looking back to the title, and equating yourself to him.

 

Perhaps this shows fear of your own fate?

REgardless, it is a very well written poem.

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The first stanza outlines the way the man should be, what a father is meant to be. The second stanza is the reality of what he is, and what he means (or doesn't, in this case) to the writer...

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