purple_shadows Posted April 26, 2004 Report Posted April 26, 2004 waiting.... waiting.... love then a flash then darkness light returns chaos follows shaking scared are you still there?
DL_Snake Posted April 27, 2004 Report Posted April 27, 2004 short, simple and to the point.... I've got a soft spot for these kind of poetry (as long as it makes sense) and yours is great. Very reflective
Merelas Posted April 27, 2004 Report Posted April 27, 2004 Very well done. I agree with DL in the fact that I like these kinds of poems, and I do like yours. My favorite part was the first two lines, because you took it just far enough without going too far. The only thing I didn't understand was if there were two people there? Maybe this is blatantly apparant to everyone else... but I didn't really get the second stanza, especially with "are you still there?" But maybe I'm just illiterate :S
purple_shadows Posted April 27, 2004 Author Report Posted April 27, 2004 Merelas~ Read between the lines, there are several ways to interpret this, there is of course the literal, which is that the power went out, but what else could it be? Are there two people, or is there just one? It depends on how you interpret it.
BlackCagedHeart Posted May 3, 2004 Report Posted May 3, 2004 I like it. I'll often write poems like this for the sheer feelings they stir up. Well Done, my purple-y friend BlackCagedHEart
dragonqueen Posted May 13, 2004 Report Posted May 13, 2004 Great poem. It's really charged with emotion. The lines are brief, to the point, and they convey a series of feelings quickly and powerfully. Kind of like a lighting flash. Maybe the first three lines are a little confusing, but the overall effect is great.
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