Appy Posted April 14, 2004 Report Posted April 14, 2004 (edited) ~ possibly finished, tell me what you think ~ Someone should tell you What is wrong Because you cannot look without yourself At the things you do Someone should tell you What is wrong Only then can you work from within yourself On the things you do Someone should tell you What is wrong About the things you do 13 04 2004, Leverkusen Edited October 20, 2014 by Appy
dragonqueen Posted April 14, 2004 Report Posted April 14, 2004 Very true. It's so hard to look at ourselves from someone else's perspective. This poem was very straight foward. That's refreshing every now and then...
DL_Snake Posted April 17, 2004 Report Posted April 17, 2004 hit the nail right on the head...ironically i just happen to be damn irritated at a guy who is exactly what your poem describes lol
Beautiful Nightmare Posted April 17, 2004 Report Posted April 17, 2004 Oh right i actually had to read it a few times to understand it and now i see its very straight forward excellent poem hun!
X-Sabre Posted April 18, 2004 Report Posted April 18, 2004 *stabbity must occur* Thankfully, not on Appy's poem. Nice deep meaning from such a short piece. Seems finished to me.
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