BlackCagedHeart Posted March 17, 2004 Report Posted March 17, 2004 Yes, I know I'm corny. I quite like to write or draw things on songs I like. Here's one based on Evanescence's song Haunted. Bleeding, screaming haunting me you're in my heart, mind and dreams why won't you leave and let me be? stop the pain stop the grief why do you keep hurting me? you whisper, I scream I keep crying Yet I keep dying BlackCagedHeart
Merelas Posted March 18, 2004 Report Posted March 18, 2004 Excellent work. I don't find anything wrong with using songs as your inspiration. I've stolen entire characters from video games before, for pete's sake! "A writer is like a raven, collecting shiny (highlited for the sake of Rydia, and other shiny lovers ) things until they weave them into their nest of a story." And, it's an extremely good poem. The short lines and non-stanzas made it more interesting. It's a style I haven't seen used frequently before, and you did extremely well with it. The only thing I might suggest would be to make it a wee bit longer... it left me wanting more, which is a very good thing in itself I hope to see more of your work!
Guest Morbid Angel Posted March 19, 2004 Report Posted March 19, 2004 wow! i loved this! so packed full with emotions! o powerful! well done! Morbid Angel
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