Elvida Posted February 27, 2004 Report Posted February 27, 2004 Never Ending Battle Ultimate loss and ultimate pain, Ultimate pleasure and ultimate gain. The fears of a lifetime in one little thought The loss of a love and the battles you’ve fought. He stands there looking out, She stands there looking in. They face each other through the ages, Neither losing, neither wins. She wants what she can’t have, He knows he can’t go back. To do so would ruin so many lives, Painting all their colours black. Ultimate loss and ultimate pain, There is no pleasure, and even less gain. The fears of a lifetime in one little thought, The loss of a love and the battles you’ve fought. -------------------------------------------------------- so there we have it. hope ya likes.
Parmenion Posted February 27, 2004 Report Posted February 27, 2004 Marvellous!! I enjoyed the ying and yang feel I had gotten from the first and last stanzas with the sprinkle of the author's personal turmoil or conflict in the middle stanzas. A unique style, one which I think you should be proud of.
Elvida Posted February 28, 2004 Author Report Posted February 28, 2004 *smiles* thanks. im actually quite amazed at how well it turned out..*dances* im going to try using that style more often.
Ayshela Posted February 28, 2004 Report Posted February 28, 2004 i really like this. The fears of a lifetime in one little thought excellently encapsulated! the balance in conflict is very well handled. the only thing which catches me on each read through - Neither losing, neither wins.i keep reading this as "neither loses, neither wins."a minor detraction in a neatly done piece!
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