When ghosts touch

[purple_shadows]

What happens when two ghosts touch?

I hope someday to know

But time is quickly passing by

And opportunities are low

 

I wonder if when ghosts touch

If there’s fireworks and light

Or if they pass through one another

And simply walk on by

 

I wonder if when ghosts touch

If there’s magick, if there’s sparks

Or if they look through one another

And remain in the dark

 

I wonder if when ghosts touch

If there’s the sense that they may fall

Or if they reach through one another

And find nothing at all

 

What happens when two ghosts touch?

I hope someday to know

As time goes swiftly running by

We sit and watch it go

[Wyvern]

I like this poem a lot, purple shadows... I think that the concept of wondering what will happen when ghosts touch is both very original and intriguing, and you do a good job of expanding upon the possibilities over the course of the poem. There seems to be a strong opposition between the possibilities of their embracing or passing through one another throughout.

 

One potential thing that might be improved in my opinion is the connection between the touchings of ghosts and the final two lines of the poem, which was a bit unclear to me. Is the narrator inactive, and thus unable to experience that touch and witness the outcome due to his idling as time passes by? That's the general impression I got from it...

 

Good stuff.

[Vlad]

Funny topic, I liked how you presented it.

The second stanza distracts from the overall structure by deviating from the rhyme scheme.

Other than that, It was an enjoyable poem.