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Love crawls serpentine

Flowing into cracks unknown

Filling up spaces inside

Then leaving without apology.

 

Nature abhors a vacuum

Inside me - unnatural?

 

Life seems odd and dis

joint

ed

at times. Love hurts

 

Ending the pain brings more

in a cycle of freudian auspicions

I crawl inside my filmy soul

Wrapping myself in gauzy sin

 

My poetic mind fascinates itself

Drawing ever inward, spinning spirals

convolate and irrigate my mind with chaos

Ever inward - outward is odd

 

Odd?

 

*snap, snap*

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I really like the 'strangeness' of this here.. the format/syntax you use and the breaking of the sentences, as far as there are any.

 

Well done; it brought to me a distinct feeling of ...alianation I think it's called. Which works great with (or because of) this stanza:

Nature abhors a vacuum

Inside me - unnatural?

It appeals to me, although I can freely admit I didn't understand every little detail... then again I just woke up and haven't had any coffee yet. I'll read it again sometime later today ^_^

 

*hugs*

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