Falcon2001 Posted February 16, 2004 Report Posted February 16, 2004 Love crawls serpentine Flowing into cracks unknown Filling up spaces inside Then leaving without apology. Nature abhors a vacuum Inside me - unnatural? Life seems odd and dis joint ed at times. Love hurts Ending the pain brings more in a cycle of freudian auspicions I crawl inside my filmy soul Wrapping myself in gauzy sin My poetic mind fascinates itself Drawing ever inward, spinning spirals convolate and irrigate my mind with chaos Ever inward - outward is odd Odd? *snap, snap*
Appy Posted February 16, 2004 Report Posted February 16, 2004 I really like the 'strangeness' of this here.. the format/syntax you use and the breaking of the sentences, as far as there are any. Well done; it brought to me a distinct feeling of ...alianation I think it's called. Which works great with (or because of) this stanza: Nature abhors a vacuum Inside me - unnatural? It appeals to me, although I can freely admit I didn't understand every little detail... then again I just woke up and haven't had any coffee yet. I'll read it again sometime later today *hugs*
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