Mira Posted February 2, 2004 Report Posted February 2, 2004 Damn it! Slam it! Drink it all down It won't hurt you now It won't hurt you now But it did and it will And it's hurting you still And you'd likely be dead If only headaches could kill Oh why and what for Had we opened this door That led to the lane Full of pity and pain. That led to the road We'd been so often told Would lead to our doom Not later, but soon. The mania grabs hold. As we take to the road, And careen out of sight 'to the damnable night. Where we barrel ahead, And are later found dead. Wrapped 'round a tree. Was it all meant to be?
HopperWolf Posted February 2, 2004 Report Posted February 2, 2004 I like the way this piece flows. Makes me think more of a song than poem (Rock). Especially like the first verse/stanza. It's really straight forward in both structure and intent. Not only that but also the language use is especially geared for the emotion of the piece, with plenty of those words that are just damn satisfying to say. I'd say that in that sense it calms down in the next two verses but the intent seems just as intense. cool stuff.
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