Vlad Posted February 1, 2004 Report Posted February 1, 2004 (edited) I don't know if I can Do something such as this. I never bother trying For anything like this. My life has never been enough To prepare me to face this. Not once had I thought That I would see this. Looking at my options I really can't decide What is the move to make. Looking at the choices I cannot really pick Which is the one to take. Everything surrounds me Yet I only feel alone. All of the paths compounded Yet I don't know where to go. Edit: Not once had I ever thought became Not once had I thought That I would have to see this. became That I would see this. Thanks Sorcerie! Edited February 1, 2004 by Vlad
Sorciere Posted February 1, 2004 Report Posted February 1, 2004 I like this! You change form from verse to verse. At first it threw me but then it made the whole thing more interesting. I have a little hiccup on line 7, verse 1 where I just can't seem to get it to flow in my head, but I am so out of the loop lately it's probably more me than you. The subject is one most of us wrestle with at some point in our lives. You captured it well, good job!
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