Wyvern Posted January 31, 2004 Report Posted January 31, 2004 Carpe Diem? A lost phrase. Savage her, trickle her woe into your golden chalice. Scowl at her innocent charm. Excessive, abundant hurt cut into oragami and paraded as genius.
Regel Posted January 31, 2004 Report Posted January 31, 2004 Seize the day, the woman, or the moment. The images that this evokes are dinged with dark shades. In every man's heart there are many choices to be made in the context of the day the person you are with and even the moment. Very nice and very short.
X-Sabre Posted January 31, 2004 Report Posted January 31, 2004 Excessive, abundant hurt cut into oragami and paraded as genius. These lines really hit home. Not really sure why, but that kind of struck me. Perhaps in a self-examination of myself, that is what I seem to be left with. I'm not really sure why, but it made me think. Thanks for the read Wyvern, I needed something like this
Yuki Kokoro Posted February 1, 2004 Report Posted February 1, 2004 I feel much as X-Saber does. Those lines did hit home, but it's hard to tell why. I think it was the image of pain and hurt being manipulated into something in the hopes of impressing people, then being shown off proudly. I've seen people who've been hurt do this as well as people who have hurt others. It drove home the message of the poem sharply. Even the reading of it was harsh. The brief dismissal of a common motivational saying in the first line set up the pained tone then the x, v, d, t, and p sounds gave those last 3 lines an even more bitter feeling for me. Excellent and concise as usual, I envy the way you can get such complex emotions and ideas into so few lines. You have a talent for writing lines that encompass whole stanzas, or heck, whole poems.
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