Falcon2001 Posted January 23, 2004 Report Posted January 23, 2004 I walked along a bitter road My fingers carved of ice I wandered where no one would go And ne'er threw the dice I held my pain like lovers, dear And closer than my friends I thought that in my sorrow I Could learn to live again I lied to everyone I knew I cheated, stole and cursed I hungered for a simple cure Answers to slake my thirst Pain was the greatest part of me It grew inside my heart I never knew just how to heal I never knew to start But love was there for me always My friends were always there They loved me in the special way That only friends can share The pain I felt in my past life Is everlasting, true But love is so much more than that 'Tis everlasting, too. Wrote this when I was bored in Cisco Networking class. Figured I'd do something different. I think it's Iambic Pentameter, but I can't recall off the top of my head, I think Iambic Pentameter is 10, but this is 8...Iambic Quantameter? Whatever. Have fun ^.^
Parmenion Posted February 28, 2004 Report Posted February 28, 2004 Always makes me feel like I have found some treasure when I randomly scroll back through old poems that I would have missed when I'm away for a while and when I come across a little gem like this! Initially the poem came across to me as a wandering train of thought till I read it a second time and found it has great cohesion and ties in nicely at the end with a love conquers all evil type feel. Well...I mean evil as society patents it today, which isn't necessarily evil depending on your subjectives views in that regard...okay I'll shut up on my tangent!! Suffice to say I enjoyed the read Falcon. Thanks for sharing.
Alaeha Posted February 28, 2004 Report Posted February 28, 2004 I didn't catch this the first time around. If you have four feet (eight syllables, when you use iambs) in a line, it's tetrameter. This one, I think, alternates between four and three. So it's a combination of Tetrameter and trimeter. In case you hadn't found out by now. Quantameter... Wow... that'd be either very, very, very small, or incredibly large. I can't remember which for the life of me.
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