Lady_Shade Posted January 22, 2004 Report Posted January 22, 2004 Praying to the Gods Earth the life giver Bewildering beauty I stand before you And pray to you Gods Fire all powerful nothing stands before you I bow before you And pray to you Gods Illusion changing perception reality molds to your whim I cry before you And pray to you Gods Light reveals all Bringing darkness to mercy I lay down before you And pray to you Gods Darkness brings shadows defying death and spreading doubt I cower before you And pray to you Gods In sincere apology, Lady Shade *Lady Shade spends the next few weeks burying all of Surius' units and placing head stones at each grave.*
lumpenproletariat Posted January 22, 2004 Report Posted January 22, 2004 I like it. The repeated third line with varying differences and the way it links all the stanzas is pretty cool I think
Falcon2001 Posted January 22, 2004 Report Posted January 22, 2004 Good poem, though I was thrown off a tad by the elemental structure. I was expecting an elemental piece and it was just five forces. Cool poem though!
Peredhil Posted January 22, 2004 Report Posted January 22, 2004 You should boldly post more. -P in haste
Lady_Shade Posted January 23, 2004 Author Report Posted January 23, 2004 You should boldly post more. -P in haste Peredhil, what do you mean? I dont understand. are you saying i should post in bold more often, or that i should be bold and post more often? In confusion Lady_Shade
Ayshela Posted January 23, 2004 Report Posted January 23, 2004 i'll hazard a guess that's the latter.. be bold, be strong, take courage in hand - and post! =) and i concur
Beautiful Nightmare Posted January 25, 2004 Report Posted January 25, 2004 Yeah i think he ment you should post more and i sgree with him i really think you should you are an excellent writter!
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