purple_shadows Posted January 15, 2004 Report Posted January 15, 2004 Baggage You You are in my dreams You just won’t go away You won’t leave my head You’re the only thing I remember when it comes to my bed. If If I could go back and erase all the pain If “us” had never happened If I hadn’t ignored my initial reaction If only, but what’s done has been done They They told me all their lies They led me to believe They claimed to be my friends They killed me in the end Inside Inside I screamed so many times Inside it seemed like I had died Inside I gave my soul to you Inside you’ve left your mark I I need to let things go I forgot how to breathe I have never thought of me I let you take control You, You need to just leave me alone If, If I didn’t ignore the signs They, They never care until it’s too late Inside, Inside I’ll never be whole again I, I have suffered too much at your hands
Loki Wyrd Posted January 15, 2004 Report Posted January 15, 2004 I enjoyed how it came together at the end, very clever.
purple_shadows Posted January 15, 2004 Author Report Posted January 15, 2004 yeah, that took some work. this is the first I've written in that manner. Glad you liked it.
Arashi Posted January 15, 2004 Report Posted January 15, 2004 I likes the flow of it. Although I caught my mind tring to put words in that weren't there that seemed to flow in my cranium. Anywho, Grand poem and I think I might use that form in a later piece I do. Although I will more then likely either mess it up or do some things different.
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