Jade Posted January 15, 2004 Report Posted January 15, 2004 I lie in bed tonight, Thoughts crashing like waves Against a broken shore. I imagine the ‘pain’ That you must feel For having made me angry. I laugh at you For your dishonesty, For your blatant truth. And I shudder At the idea that I care Enough to be awake. So I try to force tears To run like the currents From my soul. My eyes itch with dryness. I stay awake wondering How I could let this happen? Then I laugh.
Yuki Kokoro Posted January 15, 2004 Report Posted January 15, 2004 Once again this style really appeals to me. I should start a fan-club. This stanza especially rings true: "And I shudder/ At the idea that I care/ Enough to be awake". Just recently I've been going though this same feeling and you capture the conflicting emotions and thoughts very consicely. The justification, the fear, and that guilty hope that they feel horrible for hurting you followed by the painful thought that they might not (which is what I got out of: "I imagine the 'pain' that you must feel for having made me angry"). The bitter laughter following the thought "how could I let this happen?" made it that much more powerful and was a good way to answer such a common question. Great job and I look forward to more.
Vlad Posted January 16, 2004 Report Posted January 16, 2004 This is good; probably my favorite thing that you've written so far. It's the most polished anyways. For your dishonesty, For your blatant truth. Really nice.
Beautiful Nightmare Posted January 16, 2004 Report Posted January 16, 2004 *hugs* i love it god i have done that hehehe!!!! Its kinda sucks! love your poem!
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