The pen-needing art a la English class

[Canid]

...and all I know is quite ignored,

my understanding seems deplored

they seem to want naught but a word

of blibble in the text.

 

...and next we see a smoking gun,

let's play with it (let's have some fun)

that's gun, thus gum, thus chewing gum,

and smoking's bad, then so is gum.

 

We'll tie it up with paper lines,

and paint it up in jarbled rhymes,

and hope it looks like cables thick

and strong, though clearly can't be it.

 

Oh pulling rabbits from our hats:

no feats of magic done with that,

a simple fabricated fact

is all they want to hear.

 

My god! It's gold! The structure's right!

The metaphors about his flight,

connected with a golden pen!

Real meaning's quite forgotten then.

 

But what's the harm in seeing scibed,

something that there was not implied,

that has not a hint a real text,

within its analytical complex?

 

 

Please do make refrains, add verses, change words and generally rewrite it however you think it should be. Comments/questions/criticisms are welcome as well of course! I am in a happy sort of angry mood right now.

[Loki Wyrd]

Haha, nice. Seems almost cynical.

[Finnius]

Wonderful, as always! Especially the 'blibble' in line 4.

 

Blibble!

[Yuki Kokoro]

Interesting message, getting so wrapped up in the poem itself that you aren't saying anything worthwhile. The cynicism comes through even more clearly with the light mocking tone.

 

The last stanza was especially great, that's one of the things I love about literature. No two people get exactly the same thing out of any poem and even if you're not seeing anything close to what the poet intended, if it means some thing to you, then it's right

 

"that's gun, thus gum, thus chewing gum/ and smoking's bad, then so is gum." This reminds me stongly of The Music Man.

 

Very good poem, with lots of meaning even.

[smallscale_mind_games]

This is great, indescribably so. I'm completely in love with nonsense, especially cynical nonsense. Woo!