Falcon2001 Posted January 13, 2004 Report Posted January 13, 2004 Yeah, the title is taken from the opening line of 'The Heart of Worship' and all that, but I hope to create a new song. When the music fades And everything's clear Will my heart have purpose Something to hold dear When the lights are gone And I'm lying alone I can hold onto hope And the mem'ries I've known When the guests have gone And the house is so cold I can still be warm inside From the stories I've told When I wake up crying Everything'll be alright I remember the good things The summ'rs of my life When the music fades And the melody dies I'll be here smiling No more sad goodbyes
X-Sabre Posted January 13, 2004 Report Posted January 13, 2004 Hmm, overall, I believe this is uplifting. It's simple structure, and I always love shortening words to make them fit. And "the heart of worship" Is that one of those songs I always see on that Christian Rock album thingie all the time? I can't think of what they call the compilation, but for some reason, I think I saw that title on that commercial.. not sure though.
Yuki Kokoro Posted January 14, 2004 Report Posted January 14, 2004 This is excellent. I love the message and the way you dealt with it. For every bad part of life there is a good part somewhere too, waiting for you to remember it or find it. I found the over-all tone very sad, but the message behind it was indeed uplifting. I also liked the rhyme and I think you did a good job with letting it enhance the piece without it taking control or being distracting. Bravo! *applauds*
Loki Wyrd Posted January 14, 2004 Report Posted January 14, 2004 I like it, it flows nicely for my reading pleasure.
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