Beautiful Nightmare Posted January 2, 2004 Report Posted January 2, 2004 *This is a song me and my boyfriend wrote together-my first time writting with anyone* So when the hurting begins And the nightmares start I remember you And it warms my heart Your the closest to heaven THta i will ever get And i dont think i truley lived Until the day we met Can you get me out? Get me out of this sleepless night Can you get me out? Get me out of this normal life Please get me out. I cant stop thinking About you And i have noticed Just how much I miss you I have become so infatuated With you I have become so sleepless Without you Can you get me out? Get me out of this sleepless night Can you get me out? Get me out of this Normal life Please get me out.
Merelas Posted January 2, 2004 Report Posted January 2, 2004 Ahh, that's sweet. As I read it, I tried to hear the rhythym that was intended, but I'm afraid it's just not the same reading it as hearing it. It's still beautiful, no matter what tempo you put to it. Well done!
Quincunx Posted January 3, 2004 Report Posted January 3, 2004 This doesn't feel like a poem with two minds. . .it feels like a poem with one mind. Only from having read your other works can I pick out the thread of your contribution, and even then it's not distinct, but part of the whole.
Loki Wyrd Posted January 3, 2004 Report Posted January 3, 2004 It was nice. Might I suggest proofreading it, however, as I noticed some easily correctable typos. I've never tried writing anything with someone else, but perhaps I'll have to give it a shot sometime. Keep up the good work.
BehindBlindEyes Posted January 3, 2004 Report Posted January 3, 2004 I wrote most of this but my beautiful great girlfriend jassette really made this song alot better. She is amazing and i love her more than anything im hoping to put music to it. I LOVE JASSETTE FOREVER XXXX
Louveteau Posted January 3, 2004 Report Posted January 3, 2004 Great song/poem, a good description of how much joy a love can bring and how not being with that love can make things look darker (that's how I interpret it anyways) I think Brian and Jassette should be happy they got each other and I know they are Brian: be nice to my lil' sis or else......
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