dragonqueen Posted December 25, 2003 Report Posted December 25, 2003 Denial. Hey, That's A river In Egypt Isn't it? What? No? It isn't? What Do You mean What's My Problem? I Don't Have Any Problems. I Much prefer To live In Denial Of Everything. What? No, Dude, Its not A river In Egypt.
Yuki Kokoro Posted December 26, 2003 Report Posted December 26, 2003 (edited) *laughs* I enjoyed this, the last sentence was great. The only thing is that the line organization is distracting; I think it takes away more than it adds. The broken style suits the conversation rhythm, but perhaps not quite so broken. Maybe put lines like, "That's a river in Egypt" and "I don't have any problems" on one line and just break it for natural pauses? Edited December 26, 2003 by Yuki Kokoro
Beautiful Nightmare Posted December 30, 2003 Report Posted December 30, 2003 *giggles* ooooo funny and i have heard this joke really bad ugh and i hate it mneh this is really funny
Vlad Posted December 31, 2003 Report Posted December 31, 2003 I like the broken style. I think that it makes it flow better with the "bad joke" theme.
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