Beautiful Nightmare Posted December 21, 2003 Report Posted December 21, 2003 Your love for me is all I need It is the air I breath You turn night to day And are always there to light my way Always loving, always caring, Always giving, always sharing. Perfect words cannot tell How perfect you are, I’m under your spell. Lost in a happy daze Hoping this wont be just a phase.
Yuki Kokoro Posted December 21, 2003 Report Posted December 21, 2003 I liked the last two lines, they're a good summery of this state of mind.
X-Sabre Posted December 22, 2003 Report Posted December 22, 2003 Just a minor spelling correction, breath should be breathe. Other than that, nice poem. Short, sweet, to the point. Even though I personally don't like the love poem genre, this is an overall good work.
Beautiful Nightmare Posted December 22, 2003 Author Report Posted December 22, 2003 Thanks but um spelling aint my best thing so im sorry!
DarkPainInside Posted December 23, 2003 Report Posted December 23, 2003 (Wow! the post i just sent looks so bland!!) Good job Arwen! You have excelled yet again lol
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