Beautiful Nightmare Posted December 15, 2003 Report Posted December 15, 2003 (edited) Its a song that i wrote but um i really dunno if its any good! Its just the start of it though! Is anybody out there? Does anybody care? Can anyone hear me scream? Caught up in deathly dreams. Im lost in this world Is there no one to show me the way? Im screaming for someone to help me I feel so lonely now Just drowning in the crowd Someone, anyone save me I see a face in the crowd Voices in my head go round Please tell me Who are you? Because i dream of you each night My savour My soul Please tell me Who are you? Edited December 15, 2003 by Arwen
Beautiful Nightmare Posted December 15, 2003 Author Report Posted December 15, 2003 I love you so much it hurts I dont understand the pain When you are next to me its like im in a dream I want you to hold my hand Tell me it will be ok Make the bad men go away All i want is you All i need is you You are my shinning star To show me my path
Loki Wyrd Posted December 15, 2003 Report Posted December 15, 2003 I'm here. I don't know what I think about this...it's not really my type of poetry. But that certainly isn't your fault.
Appy Posted December 16, 2003 Report Posted December 16, 2003 I sense a little Linkin Park influence here.. wish I could here the music with this, it's not bad at all hun *hugs* miss you
DarkPainInside Posted December 17, 2003 Report Posted December 17, 2003 this is really good! (I LOVE linkin Park!!!) I CARE ARWEN!!! Have hope!
Quincunx Posted December 18, 2003 Report Posted December 18, 2003 re: DarkPain's signature: If you take a group of monkeys and put them together with typewriters, eventually you'll be able to produce any work of human history. Asylum operators might be trying a similar theory with people and God. That a monkey can't tell the difference between "Friends, Romans, countrymen" and "owethR TFGKL dlakd" hasn't occured to them yet. Going back to the thread in Cabaret Room that compelled me to post--Arwen is a poet for whom free verse is correct. The first verse is flavored with form in the first four lines and a true couplet further down, but if this were compressed into meter, it would sound trite. Instead it flows, sweet and dim without music behind it, a dreamlike quality that I have learned is part of Arwen-the-poet, whispering 'help' so as not to alarm anyone who hears.
Beautiful Nightmare Posted December 21, 2003 Author Report Posted December 21, 2003 *smiles at Quincunx's reply* well thank you very much thanks all of you! I would like to know what thread in the Cabaret Room compelled you to post Quincunx!!
Peredhil Posted December 21, 2003 Report Posted December 21, 2003 Just back and of course had to read something by my Arwen. Your writing continues to grow in power, M'dear (although your spelling is still occasional! Don't worry about it - spelling and grammar for you are mere clouds of vapor over an increasingly bright sun). I'm not going to bother addressing the subject of WHAT you wrote - because you know my heart toward you, and can know it is faithful not to change. *hugs* -PereDad
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