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Fade To Nothing

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I'm walking in these dull days

Thinking about nothing.

Thoughts elude me in these days,

I can no longer stand this suffering.

 

Fade to nothing,

The only refuge I can find.

So sorry that I'm fading to nothing,

I can't help it, I'm losing my mind.

 

Someone please listen to me,

Even if these are silent words I speak.

Someone please help me,

I need the strength for I am weak.

 

Fade to nothing,

Feeling so cold inside.

So sorry that I'm fading to nothing,

I can't help it, I've lost all pride.

 

I'm almost gone from this world,

I don't care, nobody cares.

So close to being nothing in this world,

I am overrun by despair.

 

I faded to nothing,

Given in to the fall.

So sorry that I faded to nothing,

I can't help it, I lost it all.

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Out of ashes,

so it has been said,

the phoenix spreads

its vanished wings.

 

Over an abyss

the rush of wind

and spoken word

brings light bursting

forth from chaos

and from death

to burn against

such darkness

as would drape

its veil o’er life.

 

Few battles

be greater or

hold more import

than those waged

by struggling hearts

to claim sufficient

light to see

the movement

of the wings of hope

from the cinders

of a quenching fire

burning weak against

a growing night.

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As with all things one needs to experience cold to understand hot. There is no sweet without sour and I truely believe that there can be no true happiness without a measure of sorrow. To what depths of despair do we have to fall to be able to understand great joy? The poem speaks to everyone that has ever walked in dull days. The dark stretches that seem like they will never end. Once inside them these depressions seem to obliterate the memories of any times where things were good. Then as suddenly as they began they end. A glimmer of light (hope) streaks across the brightening sky and slowly things begin to improve. Walk slowly and take the time to enjoy the light because the dark patches are often too long. I enjoyed your work Doomgaze.

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  • 7 months later...

Came upon this a bit randomly (hence the date gap inbetween my post and the last one... :yuiredface:), but wanted to extend my kudos to ye all the same, Doom.

 

Not only is this very smoothly lyrical, the rhyme and meter you used in here very much made it feel like a song to the point that I'm *still* sitting here hearing the vague seed of its' tune in my head (only vague, sadly, because I'm no composer).

 

I also empathize quite a bit with it. The poem reminds me very much of how I felt after I cheated on someone for the first time. Quite a hollowed-out pain.

 

Very well written.

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  • 3 weeks later...

Emotive responses from this piece,

Saddness because I have felt the touch of dispair that made me wish to become formless, so as not to effect the world with my presence.

Empathy for the words written because the emotions they create in me are possible echos of the emotions in the writer.

Compassion, because I know the hurt, and depth of dispair, I have seen it destroy people, I have felt it strengthen me.

 

Memories of it never fade, but they keep me reminded of why I am who I am.

Fading from the lives of those around you can be done, but the loss is generally far greater than the dispair that makes people seek to do so.

 

Thank you for the poem, reminders of my own mortality are always so well timed.

 

*looks at fate standing in the shadows grinning*

 

:raven:

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