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Found a conversation on Poerty (as opposed to Poetry) in the Megatokyo Creative Writing Forums.

 

Among other things it had the lists of the top ten Poertic Titles and the most Irritating rhymes.

 

I figured I'd take a shot at writing a Poerm. Might as well write a cliche for fun. :)

 

Incidentally... Every rhyme I used here is on the list of the Top Ten Annoying Rhymes, and my title combined two of the definitive Poertic Titles.

 

I think I'm a fine Poert. :D

 

Sorrow and Suffering

 

I can't forgive you for these lies,

the pain is tearing me apart.

Each time I look into your eyes,

a twisting knife blade tears my heart.

 

The tears I've shed, they fell like rain,

but even tears can't fill the hole

you tore in me. I hate this pain,

it bites me deeply, to the soul.

 

Your image haunts my dreams at night,

a demon I can't help but hate.

It fades, while it still brings me fright.

This ritual is my nightly fate.

 

Yet even in these horrid dreams,

the worst of all: It sparks a fire

that grows until at last it seems

my heart will burst with mad desire.

 

But still you dwell outside my cage.

I can't reach you through all this strife.

Despite my desperate, starving rage,

I'll never reach you in this life.

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two points:

 

1. if i didn't *know* you were trying for cliched, i'd probably be in there to check your temp or something.. ;>

 

2. you DO realize, don't you.. that it's horribly unfair and completely *wrong* that even when you're trying for horrible cliche and annoyance, you still do it so *well*!

 

smooth as silk for all the cliche.. i particularly liked "desperate, starving rage".

 

innnnnnnteresting.

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