Valdar and Astralis Posted December 1, 2003 Report Posted December 1, 2003 (edited) I cannot but hate my life, So I'll just write another, In place of what is, write, Of dreams and moon-whisper. In these dreams and fantasies, I revel every day, Are these dreams bad for me, No one can say. Forget the world, say, To blind one eye, For until reality bites, The mundane fades. It's my place, My dreamaway, Little hidey hole, Escape to my fairy land -Edit: Block sequencing Edited December 2, 2003 by Valdar and Astralis
Gwaihir Posted December 2, 2003 Report Posted December 2, 2003 Mildly unusual use of commas, but once I get used to them I like it Also, a pleasing way of making good out of bad. You start with a first stanza that sounds like a angsty goth poem, but by the end its escapist, but cheerful
whynotsin Posted December 2, 2003 Report Posted December 2, 2003 here I thought I was the only one who escaped into dreams
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