kandara Posted November 14, 2003 Report Posted November 14, 2003 The flames that consume hopefully all of us soon, the whole human race taken away from this place so it can start anew. Let the fire burn all we have done to nothing but ash - our bodies, building, and life itself. Let the eternal flame burn it all, the wars and hatred burn away. Burn and consume all that you see - a cleansing by fire is what we all need. End all wars with your flames and your heat. With your flame burn all who started the war games, we will never learn that war is not fun. The only sure way to make sure it is done is to burn and consume - please fire and flame, do it soon.
Kalypso Posted November 14, 2003 Report Posted November 14, 2003 You might as well wish for Armageddon. World destruction through the eyes of a pyro. ... That was actually my first impression of your poem. I understand the point your trying to make though. YOu express it well. You do use the word burn a lot, you might want to try another word to replace it in some areas. If i'm too harsh let me know and i'll tone it down a bit next time.
kandara Posted November 15, 2003 Author Report Posted November 15, 2003 No that is fine not to harsh at all. Thank you for the feedback. I am a bit of a pyro hehehehe
Nyyark Posted November 18, 2003 Report Posted November 18, 2003 Cool, I like it alot. It reminds me of Psalms in a way. I look forward to seeing more from you.
Peredhil Posted November 18, 2003 Report Posted November 18, 2003 Reminds me of the Book of Revelations, armageddon indeed. May it come soon.
kandara Posted November 26, 2003 Author Report Posted November 26, 2003 Thank you, I will be posting more. I got a couple more works in the fire.
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