X-Sabre Posted October 26, 2003 Report Posted October 26, 2003 (edited) [removed due to worthlessness of the author] Edited November 28, 2003 by X-Sabre
Salinye Posted October 26, 2003 Report Posted October 26, 2003 X, this poem truly moved me because it felt like it was written from the heart. I'm not sure if that's the case, but it gave me that impression. I also thought the flow and rhyme scheme was subtle and smooth. Thank you for sharing and I hope you feel better. :0) ~Salinye
WrenWind Posted October 26, 2003 Report Posted October 26, 2003 *hugs* your poetry gets better with every post Hon.
Loki Wyrd Posted October 26, 2003 Report Posted October 26, 2003 Not a good trip? Acid? I like to write while my 'shroom trips are tailing off myself. Nice poem btw.
Guest Morbid Angel Posted November 2, 2003 Report Posted November 2, 2003 As I read this poem, it painted pictures of the images in mind- Deeper and deeper, I slide into the pit. I reach and grab, but only get loose dirt. Well done! i really liked this!!! Morbid Angel
reverie Posted November 2, 2003 Report Posted November 2, 2003 ...be careful not you lose your own true color to pixialated reality you've unleashed... revery the dreamlost "all things in moderation...(me, but i prolly stole it from aristotle)" the dream continues...
Yatsuna13 Posted November 3, 2003 Report Posted November 3, 2003 as i was reading your poem i was ofcourse trying to find the deeper meaning...i found it, i too feel as if i slide further into the pit but still i hold on to my soul...never give up what you have
Thinas Posted November 9, 2003 Report Posted November 9, 2003 (edited) Good poem, Sabre. To be honest, I hadn't expected you to write poetry, so I'm pleasantly surprised. Like Loki Wyrd stated, it reminds me of a bad trip of some sort. I really like the way you describe losing the struggle against the addiction, and especially the incredible cost. Your soul for feeling like a king just once. Go fight for your soul. It was taken without right. Someone who isn't as bad or as uptight as people are led to believe - Edited November 9, 2003 by Thinas
Beautiful Nightmare Posted November 9, 2003 Report Posted November 9, 2003 Aww i love it! I havent talked to you in ages apart from the brief encounter we had we have to end that i miss talking to you! Great poem hun!
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