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The Pen is Mightier than the Sword

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Hello. Obviously, I'm new here, but I'm ettic to find a poetry board (not tha I've sought any out before). I found a link on an elfwood gallery and was led here. I like what I see so far, so I thought I'd see how some of my work might be received and go from there.

 

Here's a few short pieces showing some aspects of my style, I guess:

 

The Immortal

 

I have wandered through time and space

Seen a thousand ages, yet no change,

A thousand lives saved at my expence,

And die at the edge of my sword.

 

And I have wandered the world over

Under grey skies and over stormy seas

Through lands torn by strife and disaster

Searching for an answer, a sign, an end

To bring satisfaction to my fate

And set me free from the chains

Of a life not my own.

 

So that I may return to the garden

Lay by the water's edge

Wrapped in your arms

In Heaven's sunlight forever

And be forever free to die.

 

- December 18, 2002

 

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I won’t be taken

by your cunning smiles

that cut the air between us

and scream out your lies.

 

I pity you, knowing

that you believe to tell the truth.

 

- June 5, 2003

 

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Wasted Effort

 

As I am running through my mind

I pause to think:

Where is it that I am going

In all this confusion and shadowed darkness?

Am I trying too hard to fulfill myself,

To make something beautiful from a blank page

And find insight in every stroke of the pen

That flows out of me, bleeds onto the page

Like spilt ink?

 

Until all inspiration is gone and I am left

To drift again through these dim realities.

 

- June 12, 2003

 

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Well, there's a sample. comment away. I'm always open to construtive critism and insight. (Sometimes there are element to your work that even you can't notice yourself)

 

Tell me if you want to see more, or whether I should go ahead and apply.

Thankies!

:P

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i absolutely love the second one.

 

and welcome, btw! Drop in to the Cabaret Room sometime, i'll buy you a drink. :)

oh, and just so you're prepared..

 

*hugs*

 

that happens a lot around here. ;)

Posted

I'm very interested in the first one. I like it, but wonder if it couldn't be elaborated on somehow.

Good stuff. Come join us or at least stay and look around :)

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