Appy Posted October 5, 2003 Report Posted October 5, 2003 (edited) ~On request, a happy poem, has a lot of flow problems though, any suggestions and comments are very much appreciated ~ The odd-one-out, being white-grey Master over the other three When it comes to eating.. call it gobbling, make that eating-spree! Always fighting for his place And making sure you know he'll go for fingers and your nose "I'm king here, now bow low!" But biting isn't in his heart A nibble 's just as good it makes you jump, reach for the bowl, make sure they still have food A big and furry ball he is when balancing on his hind trying to wash the down and under onlookers he's never mind That's when we call him little Buddha though Winter is his name he's becomming a bit clumsy but we love him all the same [05 oktober 2003, Leverkusen] Edited October 20, 2014 by Appy
Parmenion Posted October 5, 2003 Report Posted October 5, 2003 Class! Really liked this Appy - well done!
Loki Wyrd Posted October 5, 2003 Report Posted October 5, 2003 Very nicely done. A fun piece for sure.
_Zen_ Posted October 5, 2003 Report Posted October 5, 2003 wow! so does this mean that i get whatever i ask for?? if so, please make the cheque payable to..... hehe. aaaanyways. personifying the rat was a good idea. you could probably keep going with the idea, the only problem is, you said rats dont run around in that thing. only hampsters do. but still, plenty of material left. i like those things running round and round in that wheel thing.
Beautiful Nightmare Posted October 5, 2003 Report Posted October 5, 2003 *hugs* wow i was so proud of my first happy poem! Bet you are if not u should be except my first happy poem was on love which is so overdone so u should be proud that its different!!! *hugs*
Rhapsody Posted October 10, 2003 Report Posted October 10, 2003 How cute. Being a Buddhist, I found this refreshing; its not often that we see work about Buddha, and even less humorous work. Bravo.
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