WrenWind Posted September 29, 2003 Report Posted September 29, 2003 The picket fence has fallen down A lawn that's never mowed Prom time pictures now turned brown The happy smiles are all just frowns The supper meal set out each night Is too often left gone cold His golden ring is not in sight The other one's gotten too bold The fairytale turned out to be A nightmare in reality
Salinye Posted September 29, 2003 Report Posted September 29, 2003 I like it Wren! Very sad, but I like it! ~Salinye
Rhapsody Posted September 29, 2003 Report Posted September 29, 2003 Ooh, i really like it, Wren! But could you explain the last stanza to me? The one about the golden ring? I was thinking wedding ring...
Peredhil Posted September 29, 2003 Report Posted September 29, 2003 Sometimes after the marriage, they *don't* live happily ever after so easily. Takes effort, appreciation, and commitment on *both* parts. This could easily be a genderless piece, which makes it's simplicity as simple as a rapier's point. Nicely written.
Parmenion Posted October 6, 2003 Report Posted October 6, 2003 /me wipes a tear from his eye... Window into despair
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