Beautiful Nightmare Posted September 27, 2003 Report Posted September 27, 2003 Why cant they just see me for who i am? Take away my looks and im just a human Take away my bravery and i have emotion Take away my cruelty and see my love But they dont bother to see this They dont bother to stay They only see me for my mask And then run away.
WrenWind Posted September 27, 2003 Report Posted September 27, 2003 Very profound for a short work . Brava!! Take away my cruelty and see my love my favorite line . Wren
Peredhil Posted September 27, 2003 Report Posted September 27, 2003 Tight - no wasted lines. I agree, few look beyond the masks people wear. You seem to improve remarkably with every poem you post. *hugs* Miss being online and talking with you. -"Dad"
Vigil StarGazer Posted September 27, 2003 Report Posted September 27, 2003 i like the duelism being represented within this poem, the contrast and parallel between its subjects are excellent. Ofcourse thou we all wear mask to protect ourselves in this uncertain world. We hide our true feelings like a deep treasure... fearing for disclosure... but long for re-discovery.
Boaz Posted September 27, 2003 Report Posted September 27, 2003 I like this poem very much, I could say works like the others, duelism, etc..etc.. but I think I will just keep it simple. "John like. Ug! Make john think! me like lots!"
X-Sabre Posted September 27, 2003 Report Posted September 27, 2003 Awesome poem. The mask one wears is the price one bears. Take it from me.
Sorciere Posted September 28, 2003 Report Posted September 28, 2003 Well written Arwen, you are getting better and better.
Appy Posted September 28, 2003 Report Posted September 28, 2003 (edited) *hugs* A very well written little thing this, sis.. like your "dad" said, you get better with every poem you post.. keep it up, put into words what you cannot comprehend and your muse will never leave you. This is part of your humanity.. I'm babbling, I know.. do with the ramblings of this girl, that feels so old, whatever you want to do with them.. it's for free afterall And some people won't run.. you know that by now I hope *hugs again* Edited September 28, 2003 by Appy
Louveteau Posted September 28, 2003 Report Posted September 28, 2003 A very nice poem indeed. If more people would read it, a lot of them would start thinking for once For me it perfectly describes how shallow a lot of people are nowadays. The fear of people to look beyond the mask. I could go on and ramble like this on and on and I'd start summing up all human flaws, but I won't Can't bother you all with that. So once again very nice.
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