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The Pen is Mightier than the Sword

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Why cant they just see me for who i am?

Take away my looks and im just a human

Take away my bravery and i have emotion

Take away my cruelty and see my love

But they dont bother to see this

They dont bother to stay

They only see me for my mask

And then run away.

Posted

Tight - no wasted lines. I agree, few look beyond the masks people wear.

 

You seem to improve remarkably with every poem you post. *hugs* Miss being online and talking with you.

 

-"Dad"

Posted

i like the duelism being represented within this poem, the contrast and parallel between its subjects are excellent. Ofcourse thou we all wear mask to protect ourselves in this uncertain world. We hide our true feelings like a deep treasure... fearing for disclosure... but long for re-discovery.

Posted

I like this poem very much, I could say works like the others, duelism, etc..etc..

but I think I will just keep it simple.

 

"John like. Ug! Make john think! me like lots!"

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*hugs*

A very well written little thing this, sis.. like your "dad" said, you get better with every poem you post.. keep it up, put into words what you cannot comprehend and your muse will never leave you. This is part of your humanity.. I'm babbling, I know.. do with the ramblings of this girl, that feels so old, whatever you want to do with them.. it's for free afterall ;)

 

And some people won't run.. you know that by now I hope ^_^

 

*hugs again*

Edited by Appy
Posted

A very nice poem indeed. If more people would read it, a lot of them would start thinking for once ;)

For me it perfectly describes how shallow a lot of people are nowadays. The fear of people to look beyond the mask. I could go on and ramble like this on and on and I'd start summing up all human flaws, but I won't :) Can't bother you all with that.

So once again very nice.

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