Ayshela Posted September 24, 2003 Report Posted September 24, 2003 wrong wrong wrong wrong wrong everything i say is wrong wrong wrong wrong wrong wrong everything i do is worse it doesn't matter what i meant it doesn't matter my intent it doesn't matter why i tried it doesn't matter if i cried wrong wrong wrong wrong wrong everything i think is wrong wrong wrong wrong wrong wrong everything i am is worse i'm sorry that i bothered you that's hardly what i meant to do i didn't mean to make you sigh i'll go away now... goodbye
Appy Posted September 24, 2003 Report Posted September 24, 2003 *hugs* this touched me deep.. very honest
WrenWind Posted September 24, 2003 Report Posted September 24, 2003 I think we have all felt this way and one time or other . *hugs* It would make a good song
Jareena Faye Posted September 24, 2003 Report Posted September 24, 2003 Well-written poem. I think we always write best when we're upset over something. But hey, I too have been there. As humans, we always do something wrong... as God, He always helps us start fresh!
Kayleana Posted September 26, 2003 Report Posted September 26, 2003 That is really well done. I know that feeling, that the poem represts it really well. ~Kayleana
X-Sabre Posted September 26, 2003 Report Posted September 26, 2003 A very well crafted poem, deep and incredibly touching. I'm sure most everyone has felt like that from time to time. Some maybe more than others. Congrats on a great poem.
Salinye Posted September 26, 2003 Report Posted September 26, 2003 Wow, haven't we all felt THAT before. Those are the times when we desperately need that small smile or word of encouragement or act of kindness that surprisingly pulls us back up again so we can like Jareena said, Start afresh. Well written and moving. ~Salinye
Ayshela Posted September 29, 2003 Author Report Posted September 29, 2003 while i am sorry that you understand, i am relieved to be understood. thank you all, and i'm sorry.
Appy Posted September 29, 2003 Report Posted September 29, 2003 (edited) *Appy tuts a bit* don't be sorry.. there's no reason to. It was not your doing that made us relate to your poem, and it is not right to excuse your own emotions... I know, I do that too. But somehow it feels wrong to say sorry for feeling the way you feel, because emotions are created out of so many components.. most of it isn't yours, but laid upon you to deal with. And by whom is a very individual experience and will determine the way you deal with the things you go through.. I hope I made some sense here.. I have the feeling that I'm rambling again, all I wanted to say, don't be sorry.. just keep writing. For me it helps that there are so many people around that can put into word exactly that which I could never phantom to be written out that clearly. I should really stop now lol *hugs* I hope you find your self-realisation soon Ayshela, it gave me strenght Edited September 29, 2003 by Appy
Kalypso Posted September 29, 2003 Report Posted September 29, 2003 *Nods her head in greeting* You're brave for sharing something so revealing. I just hope it's one of those fleeting feelings in life. Defeat is such a tragic finale. Nice poem, I enjoyed it. Kalypso
Regel Posted September 30, 2003 Report Posted September 30, 2003 What if what you are saying is absolutely true? Then this is not defeat but rather a painful realization of the truth. A person call fall in love with entirely the wrong person, it happens all the time. When we are in love, the object of our love can do no wrong, so it must be us. It the only rational explanation to a bad situation we can up with. It is a beatifully sad poem Ayshela.
Ayshela Posted October 2, 2003 Author Report Posted October 2, 2003 mmm for *me*, more an acknowledgement of my absolute refusal to be where i'm not wanted, where all i can do is hurt and upset people because despite my best efforts.. i'm just wrong. damage control. i can, at least, do that much.
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