Shackles

[Appy]

I toss and turn, unable to sleep

Can't find the manner, in which to lie

This cocktail of emotions is driving me nuts

And it feels all but natural

for my lungs to breathe

 

- I will have to rest -

 

But everyday I get up again

with shackles around my feet

showing the world what I am

 

- Condemned for life -

 

I

will

put

an

end

to

it

 

- now -

 

And life will again be

as intoxicating

and exhilirating

as it used to be

 

- I am allowed to hope -

 

[24 setember 2003, Leverkusen]

 

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~ A flower for the person who can actually figure out what this is about ~

~edit; Shakles should say Shackles ofcourse ~

Edited October 20, 2014 by Appy

[Loki Wyrd]

I like it, and that is an interesting style you have there.

[Appy]

Thanks

 

I'm always ready for a new style.. and this is how it happened in my head.. I sometimes wish I could write a sonnet or something, but that's just not me I guess.. I'm too Chaotic for that

[Wyvern]

I liked the poem as well, Appy... In terms of what it seems to be about: in the first stanza of the poem, the narrator describes a certain powerful event of the past that disturbs her rest and hinders her through everyday life. Then, as the poem progresses, the tone shifts and becomes more optimistic as she notes that she'll rely on hope and put an end to the event's haunting her. Thus, the poem might ultimately be about relying on hope and optimism to overcome the dark event's of one's past...

 

Interesting structure too! Nicely done.

[Appy]

Hmmm , I'd say that that's close enough ...

 

*Appy hands Wyvern his flower, and giggles. The flower has a little note attached 'It is illegal to sell this flower to third parties without consulting the first party (being the giver, Appy) about the intentions of the second party (being the receiver, Wyvern)' *

 

I actually wrote it because I stopped smoking.. but I like your explanation.. more applying to anyone that way.. what was that word again, ah right "universal"

 

Thank you for the nice words on the style.. I like experimenting, but it's always a guess if it's still readable/flowing then, so ...Thank you