Skywise Posted September 19, 2003 Report Posted September 19, 2003 The original poem is located here, at Poetry.com and was a Grand Prize Winner. Given no information to indicate that Skywise is L. D. Hirshberg, plagarism must be assumed. i'm new here...i got here because of sorciere..of whatever she i called here just a first timer here Her In a Chinese restaurant, we split the last of the rice and use it to soak up gleaming sauce. Always, we try to finish the sauce. After requesting a fresh pot of tea, our conversation turns to "her," my imaginary next lover. "She could be right outside," you say, and I nod, remembering when you were her. The tea finally comes. We burn our lips awake again. During a lull, my attention wanders and I begin to scan the street. If she were there, she might turn and see us in the window, chatting. I try to look available as I sip.
Sorciere Posted September 19, 2003 Report Posted September 19, 2003 So glad you made it here, this place is full of so much talent. I already told you I love the way this is written, so obscure yet it tells such a story. I hope you will become a regular here and maybe even apply to be a member once you have settled in!
Skywise Posted September 19, 2003 Author Report Posted September 19, 2003 what are the conditions of being a 'member' then?
Sorciere Posted September 19, 2003 Report Posted September 19, 2003 I believe this link should answer any questions you have, also there is always advice in #thepen Becoming a Member
Alaeha Posted September 19, 2003 Report Posted September 19, 2003 Just go read the necessary information in the Recruiters hall. That tells you what you need to know, I think.
Alaeha Posted September 19, 2003 Report Posted September 19, 2003 It would appear that she beat me to it. *Laughs* Ahh well. It doesn't matter, I guess. Anyways... Welcome to the boards!
Peredhil Posted September 19, 2003 Report Posted September 19, 2003 Wow... I wish my first poem had been half so well done... Welcome indeed.
Appy Posted September 19, 2003 Report Posted September 19, 2003 *Appy applauds* I like this a lot! Welcom to the board, you come well-directed I see
Rhapsody Posted September 20, 2003 Report Posted September 20, 2003 WHOA! You should consider getting published. I really love your style. This stream-of-consciousness style is far too rare these days. You make it coherent and whimisical at the same time. And even though you are dealing with a very overdone concept of love, you manage to make it sincere and not trite. In the faint possibility that you are Asian, I extend a greeting to you, one Asian to another. Welcome to the Pen! You'll fit right in.
Sorciere Posted September 20, 2003 Report Posted September 20, 2003 He's dutch, close though! Both foreign to me hehe
reverie Posted September 21, 2003 Report Posted September 21, 2003 hmm, reminds of a passage from novell... like bill bryson or david sedars... i agree some with rhap, stream-of-consciousness is fun, but can get chaotic if taken to the random extreme... bravo... revery the dreamlost "streams of things, and tangle strings..." the dream continues...
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