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(It's a poem about suicide but no worries,I'm not trying anything)

 

I don't care...

About it any more

I don't care...

Just want to shut the door

 

I want to die...

Find a kinife that loves my flesh

I want to die...

Watch the blood spill on the floor red and fresh

 

Everything is over...

I just going to die

Everything is over...

This is my goodbye

Posted

Glad you put in that bit up front... Because if you go and die, I swear I'll hunt you down and kill you. *Mock Glares*

 

It's a well done poem...

 

*Hugs*

  • 1 month later...
Posted

*nods* i also am so VERY glad you're not trying anything.. cuz if you did i'd have to hunt you down and drag you back kicking and screaming all the way..

 

only one suggestion, aside from "don't you dare" :)

 

Watch the blood spill on the floor red and fresh

the metre of this is just a bit off to go with the rest, and i think i'd edit that to "watch the blood spill, red and fresh"

 

otherwise - *nod*

loud and clear, my friend, loud and clear.

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