reverie

tapping into raw emotion and being able to effectively express is not easiest thing to pull off... With time's tempering...and some painstakingly disciplined honing... I think this artist could go far... *wonders off to the woodshed... to contemplate and do some honing of his own..* revery the dreamlost "reality seemed better in my sleep...(me?i think,maybe...)" the dream continues...

"Physician Heal Thy Self..."Luke 4:23 ... revery the dreamlost "..." the dream continues...

once again... great structure... well I like it... revery the dreamlost "You keep me coming, that is a gal that'll kill dem stunning(311)" the dream continues...

hmm, I actually remember being concerned the first time she posted all this... she later explained it was from her old collection and had senced worked out a lot of it... or something to that effect... I wouldn't worry about her though...she's got potential... exercising demons takes lots of energy though... get some rest dear... revery the dreamlost "a shell of a man I’ve grown to be… nothing I see pleased me in me…(me)" the dream continues...

very nice... refreshlying simple and selfless Painting pictures with words... seems a lost art sometimes... nice to seem someone still carrying the torch... revery the dreamlost "we suffer in the shudder of the smallest glimspe...(me)" th dream continues...

meep... rev...

...ryhme scheme getting you down? Then try to figure out where it springs from... Example: My structures pull from multiple sources... but the major back bone can be found in the rhythms and melodies deeply etched in me from 7 years of playing band music(saxophone) in school, juxtapositioned against my dad's and brother's constant rotation of would-be-southern rock/alternative rock bands respectively, filtering off and on through my house... Once I realized what collective pool I was drawing on...it made it easy to actively expand it... My brain likes ecletic music... So throw in a few weeks of listening to Pecy Granger/No doubt/Outcast/random radio, and whatever else shows up in the rotation of over 1000 MP3's... waalaa... you got variety... Just keep writing though... you seem young to me... if not in age, then in soul... once you mature you'll be fine... revery the dreamlost "lord, I was born a rambling man...(allman brothers)" the dream continues...

I like the shoe and chad poem... Commentary seems your strong points... stick with it... in general, work on the flow though... revery the dreamlost "i'm just a rose unpicked left to wilt on the stem of life...(me)" the dream continues...

...has beautiful structure the ghost of e.e. cummings would approve i think... revery the dreamlost "i love everyone, except the people I hate...(me)" the dream continues...

Awesome... love the pretext, form, flow, and structure... lovely... revery the dreamlost "dot, dot, dot...(aimee mann...) the dream continues...

Hey all, just thought I'd share some... I'm getting two of my poems published in a non-profit maryland association news letter (M-Anation) I belong too... It's not much but's it's a start... the Poems are: 'Christmastime' and 'Alone...' 17NOV2001 … written for Signe Christmastime, Another day, as it is known Takes time to sparkle all it’s own And lonely ones shed tears no more As loved one’s knock upon your door. When calls are made, old friends remember They’re not forgotten in cold December In a rush, no time for thought Hearts are warmed, kind words are bought Sent many miles, with gifts that say I remembered you, will you remember me? As smiles turn inward one can reflect It’s Christmastime, do not forget To wish all well that you hold dear And fill them all with you good cheer… 13SEP2003 Alone, but only just so… I find myself in my usual state, Lost again in that weary flow of thought That calls on me to justify my existence Aloof and alone, but only just so… I speak to the voice, which is me. In quiet tones of acquiescence… For I am never truly alone Just starved for good conversation… I, apologizing for the silence, Listen, as somewhere deep and willfully half-forgotten, a child cry’s again: Where are we going, and why are we here? And why does our heart spill over with tears? Why do I die, while you get to thrive? In forgiveness half-given, but only half-tried. If turmoil kills me, then I bless back to you A Three-fold forgotten misshapen half-truth As we cling and we chafe to memory’s waste, I remember... the horror and price to make safe. What is it we did, or did much too late? To burden with lies, so selfish we hate… I pull back from the gaze, which burns my wisdom so thin And makes the reality of myself seem so hollow to that loneliest side of me, I, we linger in the remembrance, sometimes too long For I do regret almost everything, and fear that is shows For the mirror of memory glows slowly in sullen repose Aloof and alone, but only just so I struggle to make peace, with the child I released… revery the dreamlost "turn, turn, turn...(the birds)" the dream continues...

in Atlanta? that's my brother's city... I grew up the outscrits of it... small pen, no? revery the dreamlost "dip,dip,dip...(REM)" the dream continues...

awesome... nice structure too... revery the dreamlost "..." the dream continues...

...kewl wyvern... it couldn't have happened to a nice almost dragon type thing... never knew how you could forever come up with all those creavtive app responces... well done... revery the dreamlost "spunk..." the dream continues...

rune ala aesop fables? very nice... how'd you do it... hmm maybe you should try to write a ballad or epic poem... The ballad of princes rune... hmm could work... revery the dreamlost "day-oooo(banana boat song)" the dream continues...

i like the one about vampires... rev...

Personally, I like getting my palm read and reading the horoscopes... mostly it's for fun... I don't put too much stock in them, but am always open to the supernatural... and i'm forever suffering deja vu... it gets annoying. Hmm, taking another spin on it, I have actually been faith healed before: back in 1998, I had a foot injury that just would not heal... After 11 months of bone scans,x-rays, braces, steriods, and a few comments like "well, you'll never see this one in the books." a friend offered to heal it for me. Using the christain variat of this power, he blessed my foot. Within 24 hours it was healed. In 48 hours, it messed up again when I tried to run on it, but bounced back in a few days. After that it was smooth sailing... So I believe there's a lot of power out there, we just have to know how to tap into it. Hmm, at another instance: I remember being asked to leave a palm reader's table at a psychic convention. He was reading my girl friend at the time, and said I caused too much interferace. Something to do with me being "water" or something. Okay that was fun... rev...

hmm, guess i'll need to find a date then... or maybe I'll just chaperon fountain instead... Nice Idea Alyshea... rev...

you rock... go you... really... revery the dreamlost "sleepy time now...(?)" the dream continues...

honestly, the phrase "silver walls" seemed over used... rev...

hmm, reminds of a passage from novell... like bill bryson or david sedars... i agree some with rhap, stream-of-consciousness is fun, but can get chaotic if taken to the random extreme... bravo... revery the dreamlost "streams of things, and tangle strings..." the dream continues...

reminds me of a fight with addiction or depression or both... cold rage also could play a role, since depression inverted in effort to deal with it often turns into anger...well, at least for guys... or you could take the alternate route of conciously trying to turn off your emotions... which will ultimently build to a breaking point of sorts and unleash whatever you mind sought to suppress... well that was fun... yeah, i agree with rhap... lot's of apathy towards the end... revery the dreamlost "reality seemed better in my sleep..." the dream continues...

a little harsh for my tastes... but you have a strong voice... particularly in your first 4 poems... you articulate your self well enough, though it'd be interesting to see what you could do if you pushed a little deeper... i bet you tell crazy antedotes in real life... revery the dreamlost "what are words for...(missing person)" the dream continues...

http://pub145.ezboard.com/bthemoonlitforest rev...

...i just think you like attention... prolly like an emotional drug to you... oh well, to each their own vice to covet and make full from nothing... revery the dreamlost "as we were speaking of the devil, you walked right in; wearing hubris like a medal you revel in...(aimee mann)" the dream continues...