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thanks, I wrote this kinda quick after skimming dragonqueen's and a few reference websites... have been toying with the idea of rewriting some of it, but no sure yet... rev...

...sounds good to me big P... rev...

Hi Wyv... That was DJ ZUJ not DUJ... oh well, It's means standby in military teletype speak... rev...

Happy birthday, ...many happy returns and all that... rev...

Happy Happy :wizzie: rev...

hmm, I vaguely remember you some... but then again, I was just a ghost as far as the UBB's were concerned... were you ever on the pre-ubb? I hung out mainly on the b2 board there... revery the dreamlost "despite you insight" the dream continues...

yeah, sure why not... go nutz... rev...

lovely... welcome, write more. rev...

Hi, folks... I'm currently listening to Steven King's On Writing: A Memoir on the Craft Now, I am no fan of Mr. King. I do not like the field he writes in or his choice of subject matter. Inspite of this, I still think he's a fine writer. In his short book, Mr. King offers us a no nonsence commentary and guilde book on the art of writing. He builds his book on the awesome foundation put forth by William Strunk, Jr.'s The Elements of Style (revised by E.B. White) Drawing from his own experience, he writes a semi-autobiographical account of how he came to be a writer and tips for buiding a good writer's "tool box." At times, he waxes philosphical, but without ever coming off as a snob or pretentious... Mr. King is Candid, Clear, and Concise in his advise, and I recommend it to all aspiring writers...Especially if you specialize in prose or any other form of fiction. Hell, artists in general could benifit from this, even athletes could... Basically, anyone with passion or hobby should read or listen to this book. oh here's a quick, fast, and dangerous version of what's in the book. Warning, it's a lot more crass than the long version... Um, actually, the website is much more concerned with the Money and business aspect...while the book is more concerned with helping foster competent writers in general... Everything You Need to Know About Writing Successfully: in Ten Minutes That is all, rev...

I like this... it has a kind of simple eloquence to it... however, your 4th stanza kind of throws me... rhythm wise that is... Oh and you did not specify what level of feedback you wanted in your profile, so I'll just wing it... This is just a friendly sugguestion, but I would have edited it to this... A brave face, I tried to show the world when his words I heard Bravery I did not have only Tears only Pain A year ago he called me A year ago today… Or, you could throw in a "yet or a but" before bravery" to better highlight the contrary... Nice website, by the way... take care, rev...

Happy birthday, Gwai and little p... Hope you have a great one... rev...

Amy Lowell Poetry Travelling Scholarship Ran across this one while doing my scholarship search for school... But apparantly this one doesn't even require you to go to school. All you have to do if you win, is agree to leave the North American for an entire year. Oh plus you have to be a native-born U.S. resident. rev...

The Smurfs... hehe rev...

yeah, after my second glance at your poem, while i in the process of posting, I kind of got the same feeling, but I had already starting the thought, so I figured, what heck... put it out there... rev...

here's some sound advice, I got once long...long ago. To get letters, you have to write letters... So, if your feeling left out for some reason or another... Just reach out... Seriously... You find that the pen alumni as a whole... are more than willing to reciprocate... ... my thoughts, revery the dreamlost "so what are word for..." (popular rock tune, well in the 80's atleast) the dream continues...

hmm, I'm left to wonder what was written, before getting erased... Ya know, I'm starting sense a theme here... or the beginnings of one... You've posted up a couple of poems now, dealing with, in one form of other, the implements of writing... Why? I have no idea... I can hazard a sloppy guess though, maybe you're deeply involved in some scientific / technical class or field that requires lot's of notes or dry erase board manipulations... hmm, maybe i'm reading to much into this; I could just as easily assume the same thing of hostess writing the "specials" on the menu board at "joe's crab shack..." hell, maybe you're even taken an artl class... Well, you got my wheels turning... That's always good thing... slightly humbled, rev...

you got me on this one... the only things that come to mind is a guy walking around with night vision googles... but most night vision operates off infared light or thermal imaging... so am not sure... Hmm, ultraviolent... Can't ultraviolent light detect certain fluids and such... maybe someone's searching for traces of something... Auras maybe? puzzled, rev...

Just an observation: In "To Stand Alone" I think you could change "Just that I've never won." to "Just in that I've never won." It's minor, but I think it would help the last line flow better with the rest of your poem... But, on second thought, it probably doesn't need it. Though you could do it. Either way, I like what you wrote. I get the impression that this was improvised? Seems like it could be refined a little more... To what end, I do not know, but it's just a feeling I get... oh well, keep it up... rev...

Discarded words? am not sure what you mean? oh wait, do you like literally mean the discarded the words of a piece of writing? Like, "anger constricted" means your ticked off by the word, so you like scribble it out... No wait minute... A picture's forming... *click* I see a writer hunched over a piece of paper.... with several words either scratched out or wore out by eraser marks...prolly a mixture both, eh? The "Anger constricted...splintered...thud" could be a pencil broken with an angry thud as it's brought down hard on the paper before him... Well, that's what I took form it... good job, rev...

I agree it's very nice. Not much to add, but I enjoyed saying it out loud to myself, several times... Even though I can't remember a one of them, or even if your poem would resemble one...It still reminds me of the childrens' poetry book: where the side walk ends cool, take care... rev...

Hmm, let's see: Parmenion turning 28...and Vald and Astral and Aardvark are both turning 23 So... 23 + 23 + 29 = 74 74 Divided by three equals 24.66 repeating... which rounds up to 25... The same age, which by some cosmic coincidence, I had in mind when I wrote my friend a birthday poem some years back... So call it Fate or laziness...or maybe a little of both... but here goes: **Clears Throat** **Hums** Flicker NOV 21, 2002 When you sing that silly song A quarter’s lapse has come and gone. Counting Candles, oh so bright Seen to rival, a star-field night. Set in flame, you face enframed. Do not dismay, these daunting rays. Within each flame, a scene will show The time you know, from flicker to glow… ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Happy, Happy... :wizzie: rev...

am sick too... but really liked what you wrote... get better, rev...

thank you everyone for your kind posts and pm's... it made my day... thanx... rev...

Happy Happy, You get a gold star. :wizzie: rev...

welcome back all, cheers. rev...