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Peredhil

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  1. One of the original Rebels of the last century. I miss him already. digs out a platter from his old record collection and walks down memory lane.
  2. Hmm. I've been reflecting on this since you started the thread... In my life and experience, what finally worked for me was to quit waiting for others to be my friend, to discover my depths, to find out how neat some parts of me are, and how repellent I find other facets of my being. Instead, I choose people with whom I want to be friends. It's a choice and a decision, a commitment to acceptance and mutual exploration. Then I set out to be their friend. I've found that many people just don't know how to be a friend to someone, and expect the other person to really do all the work, while they sit back like a judge, accepting or denying as each word or action comes in. Friendship for me isn't like that. Those of you (and there are many at the Pen), know how I think a friend should be, because you've received it as an example. Commitment up front, for friends will bump and bruise each other, and the wary heart has to know the other person will hang around long enough for moving on and healing. Honesty in communications, not holding back to "protect" the other person, but rather trusting that they'll not flee. Offering feedback about the other that judges actions and words, but not the person. Many people, even toward themselves, can't separate those. They're caught in the "I did something bad, I'm a bad person" trap, instead of the more hopeful, "I did something bad, but I'm a basically good person. Let me learn from it and try not to do it again." As my Mom told me, "You have to be a friend to have a friend, even during the times you don't feel like it." Peredhil hugs again.
  3. I look forward to watching this develop. It would be neat if, after you've gathered all your facts here, you gift us with the final cohesive work as well. Could be a useful example of research.
  4. Happy Birthday! Thank you for all the details and facts with which you constantly support me in IRC Pen chat. In the way my mind thinks it works, facts are useless, so I greatly appreciate a precision and memory like yours. Turning eighteen can also open up freedoms as well as responsibilities. although I suppose freedom can be scarier than no choices at all for some. Refraining from hugging, Peredhil shakes hands instead.
  5. powerful image. I'm too blown away at the moment to be critical. welcome *back*.
  6. I love the way you use figures of speech in the "My Turn", I think they really bring a meaning truer than the literal through to the reader. And the emotional "ownership" of the second stanza, accepting the feelings and cherishing them is a pretty healthy thing in my opinion. In "Longing" you really hit your stride. Some of the phrases evoked strong memory-echoes in me as I read. I think there's a love-hunger in all of us. If it isn't met when we're children, we feel empty and hungry the rest of our lives. "Longing for a Daughter" is nicely ambiguous - it could be the Daughter's longing, or the speaker's desire for a daughter. The next line repeats what is almost a poetic pun. I think your poems are getting stronger and more developed as you continue to post. Your command of syntax and grammar is even more applaudible since you aren't a native English speaker. hugs Keep posting!
  7. this was a FUN read. I found myself chanting it as I read it aloud, as if it were a skald's Edda. The death and violence for love is really powerful. And I wish you would make time to copy some of your things. Best way I've found is to open two windows, one to each location, and then copy-n-paste from old to new. It reads better if you break it up into many posts than putting everything into one ultra-long post. I'm really glad you made time to share with us, Snypiuer. I've missed your words. -Peredhil
  8. Doubles over laughing I'm told I'm a difficult person to have as a husband or parent... I'm relentlessly loving, patient, and inflexible on certain standards...
  9. Ha! Reread with a bit of sleep in me, and found the cadence. If it's read correctly, it bounces right along, doesn't it? I thought it good before, but now I think it's great.
  10. Hmmm. Given the choice, I'd choose the positive affirmations. Shoot for them and forgive yourself for failure - and try again. Things like "superMom" are almost asking to fail, in my experience. Little tiny goals, boring baby steps they may be, often get you further on the board across the chasm than taking a running leap shouting, "I can, I can!". Positive thinking only seems to work for me, at least, when combined with reality. I WILL listen to my daughter for 30 more seconds before cutting her off. I WILL ensure that tonight, I've looked through her homework and praised her for each part done right - and then explained gently what was wrong and why - then praise her for fixing it. Being present the whole time. I will turn off the TV, and be in the same room with my daughter for 1/2 hour. If there is nothing to fill the silence, I will force her to choose to have me read a book or a chapter to her, or her to read a book or a chapter to me. I will not allow other choices. The next time I blow up at someone, when I've calmed down, I will apologize for blowing up. If I was right, I will not apologize for being right - only for how I communicated. Small achievable goals, for which you can praise yourself unmercifully, allowing none of the voices which started the piece to stop you no matter how "false" you know the praise to be. Point the accomplishment and say, "argue with results - goal set, goal achieved". Train to be a winner instead of training to be a failure.
  11. I'm thinkin' that even if a person disagrees about the causes which lead up to such an event, that the fallen are worth mourning because they fell. The United States of America lost an innocence in that attack. For too many, the news of terrorist actions in other countries, the heart's blood and deep emotions being played out, all were news bites and bathroom breaks. If no other lessons are taken away, I would hope that the reality and finality of deaths, and empathy for non-combatants are learned.
  12. I kinda like this, and really didn't have a problem with the flow or the subject as expressed. Keep writing 'em - I'll keep reading 'em!
  13. Peredhil

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    I particularly like the last sentence.
  14. So, was it the forces of WAS who purchased this billboard? WAS Billboard
  15. Peredhil begins laughing even and he winces and his hands move to a protective gesture.
  16. Have you *SEEN* most of the people at a nude beach... lust is not an option... But seriously... This reads like a yes/no answer, but I'll follow the "thoughts" implication and give reasoning. The readers roll their eyes at the thought of another Peredhil lecture Yes. 1) The human body is, in and of itself, a magnificent work of art. And the variety! Endless variations on a theme, unique ripples of the same water. A form so marvelously wrought that God used it as a metaphor for the current administration's called out ("church") in the New Testiment section of the Christian Bible. 2) Strangely enough, it's human psychology (after the first shock) to become rapidly bored with nudity. There's quite a mind-set difference to seeing lots of nude people, contrasted with thinking, "Oh my, she's NEKKID under those clothes! insert panting here(hormones are such a rush... Or worded differently, sometimes, you can be more naked in clothes than when everyone is wearing nothing. Kinda like finding you are loneliest in the middle of a crowd where everyone knows all but you. I first noticed this effect at a beauty contest, of all things. Up on the stage were five pretty women in skimpy bathing suits, leaving little to the imagination. Prolly not a surprise that I was watching the audience and judges watch them. I noticed all the judges (male) weren't looking at the contestants! Instead they were straining to look at a woman in a mini-skirt bent to drink from a fountain off to the side. The power of the unknown on the imagination... A male's imagination is a woman's friend. All physical fantasy collapses into reality. There are all sorts of implications one can spin from that thought process, but I'll spare you. I could go on with more reasons, but they are minor additions. Those two would be the primary ones.
  17. Peredhil reads Zool's feedback, nodding - and gets to the line about custody. Whee - that's wonderful!!! I'm so filled with joy for you - you must feel the relief and pleasure like the first drink of water after a desert trek. Erm, back to our regularly scheduled thread...
  18. I think this really has a spark to it that could be grand - but I had trouble when I was reading it with some of the phrasing. Could be me though.
  19. The working thread I do like the conversational gambit of your work. One thing you've mentioned is self-checking your own poems. One thing that's worked for me is to read it aloud and listen to the rhythm and beat, if it's a rhyming poem. If that brings to light any suggestions for change, implement the change and then have someone else read it aloud to you. You may find that they, not knowing how it should sound, do the breathing and phrasing in a totally different pattern. Where the lines break, how you use punctuation, these can help with maintaining the pattern you want. -Peredhil
  20. for "sais", do you mean "says"? English is awkward with so many strange language rules... I think you'll find many people who've felt the world looked at them this way. Just have to spit in its eye and believe in yourself enough to try - expecting success, not failure. If you do all your planning for failure, you often succeed only at failing. Attitude is important.
  21. You have some good stuff in the Banquet Hall. Now that the summer's over, I hope you get time to return and write more.
  22. This is a U.S. Army graduation speech 19Aug2002 for a class of student who'd just completed their Advanced Individual Training (where they learn their madz0r l33t job skillz. ) Figured I'd warn the Gentle Reader before they start for it is looong and we have an international membership. Hopefully, there isn't anything which could be taken offensively, although I wouldn't expect everyone to agree with my points of view. -Peredhil ~~~ Greetings, Distinguished guests, family, friends, and the stars of this show, the graduates. In thinking back seventeen and a half years to my Advanced Individual Training -AIT- graduation, only two thoughts remain clearly in my mind: One: I will never be as old as that guy droning on up there. From where did they pull him? Two: How long is this going to go ON?! Will he ever finish? I really can't do much if you share the first thought, however I'm going to use your help in dealing with the second. Who has a watch? pick one At ten minutes from right now, you stand up and sit down. that way, not only I, but everyone will know I will do my best to wrap up and finish within two minutes. The Army equips us with various tools to meet the challenges of life. It also teaches an easy method of instruction: Tell them what you're going to tell themn, Tell them, And then tell them what you told them and send them out to practice. This model meets nearly any teaching situation. I'm going to tell you a short story, I'm going to break down a few tools you've been taught, and then I'm going to revisit the story. If time permits because I talked quickly, I'm going to give you some definitions. The purpose of this is in hopes that in seventeen plus years, or even seventeen minutes, you will retain more to help with your growth than I did. The story... Picture if you will, a civilian watching television. A commercial comes on, with stirring music. The camera focuses on a young woman, with perfect camouflage that strangely enough doesn't mask her simple wholesome beauty, toiling alone in the lemon predawn light up a twisting trail through heavy pine trees. Small animals scamper out of her way as she climbs with a resolute look on her face. Ignore the voice-over for a moment, it's the image we're painting here. Her rucksack is clean and tautly bulging, her M16 grasped firmly in her hands, the look of eagles in her eyes. Breathing deeply, she scrambles up the last few steep steps of the trail, and comes out into a mountain-top clearing, startling a multi-point buck which bounds away. As she enters the clearing, the sun dawns, casting its warmth on her upturned face, and the camera sweeps around to show the incredible view from the mountain-top, the rippling hills, the forested valleys, etched to perfection with knife-edged morning shadows. As the camera completes its circuit it shows the solitary soldier standing a proud conqueror on the bald mountain's crown. The screen freezes and giant golden letters announce: "An Army of One." Our viewer sighs and perhaps thinks, "I want an identity. I want to feel like I have a purpose, a noble purpose. I want to be strong, without doubt, confident, trained. I want to be that Army of One, an individual complete to myself. Twenty-some thousand dollars for college doesn't hurt either." Got the picture? Isn't advertising wonderful? We'll be coming back to that image. I've just told you a story, now let me explain some of the tools you've recently learned. "E Pluribus Unum", Out of many, unity. One of the foundations of the social experiment stamped on every coin we make. Put into practice in the Army. You've shared a common experience in Basic and AIT. You've learned a common language filled with terms like "Hooah", "74Bravo" or "31Whiskey". You've received a common basic military training. At this point, no matter where you came from, what your background, what your gender or skin color, you are now Army-green. that melting pot tradition, which takes each person's strengths and weaknesses and blends them together to get any mission done, is one of the things that separates out Army from nearly any other in the world. We train and empower soldiers at the lowest ranks with responsibilities and equipment that in another country are often only entrusted to officers. From the highest views, you are part of a tradition. From the lowest views, you are part of a team. You will be challenged based on your capabilities, on your motivation, on your demonstrated words and deeds. Too many people use differences as an excuse not to do the hard tasks. "He or She is always on me because I'm different." He or She better be on you, because you matter, and they care. Not about your comfort, but about the mission and your growth as a human being. It makes sense really. The stronger you are, the more you have to give to others, and the more secure you are in receiving. And really, that's why we are strong - to defend others. You must not only talk the talk, but walk the walk. By now you should realize all the words in the world won't dig the foxhole. And if you are judged on something other than Army-green, the Army doesn't lie or hide; there are legal avenues of recourse. The Army regulations are your canopy of protections as long as you do the right thing. Doing the right thing. You have a wealth of tradition, and defined regulations to guide you. But many armies have those. The American Soldier is held to a moral and ethical standard which in my experience is higher than any other army in the world. No matter what was considered right or wrong before you came into this army, you have a common value system by which to judge any situation now. I'm certain by now you've heard the acronym LDRSHIP. I'm going to throw in the mission vowels to give you a ten-letter tool. Taking notes isn't necessary, listening is. Loyalty - Faithfulness to obligations and duties. This starts it all off for a soldier. The first letter in leadership and the foundation. When you entered the Army, you started with an oath. You learned your fundamental duties in your Three General Orders. Ethical - Being in accordance with the accepted principles of right and wrong that govern the conduct of a profession. We have a Code of Conduct which, with our values, governs and guides us. Adaptable - Capable of becoming, or being made suitable to a particular situation or use. Whether its running a computer, filling out a travel voucher, or buffing a hallway, we are capable and adaptable. Don't get locked into any one job. You must be adaptable to any circumstance. Duty = An act or course of action required of one by position or law, a moral obligation. At the lower ranks, your position requires you to be obedient. To trust. And to learn. You must always stay focused not only on the task, but on the reasons. Try to learn from everything you do or see. Set goals and research, plan now for two ranks higher, and try to see the bigger pictures. Learn to think. Even if you plan on doing one tour, and getting out, it will help you to grow as a person and develop strengths that can be used in any job. Enthusiastic - Having or showing great excitement or interest, very positive. It is so much easier to tear down someone else, so you can be lazy. To make excuses or to be cynical. Any one can bump along the stream's bottom. It's an excuse not to try - and risk failure. Your attitude is more important than your intelligence. Failed genius is proverbial, but people who persist and refuse to give up accomplish the seemingly impossible. When setting a goal, look at the end goal. When performing, look at the next step. I'm told the Russians have a saying, "One step at a time, you can walk around the world." On a side note, if you're ever trapped into speaking in front of a group, for example, going to a promotion board, enthusiasm is your friend. You breathe deeper and talk louder. This will steady your voice and no one has to know how nervious you really may be. Respect - Willingness to show consideration or appreciation, to appreciate, honor or esteem. Treat others as they positively want to be treated. Acknowledge the person within the uniform, even when you can't acknowledge or support their actions. Praise publically and correct privately, whenever possible. Selfless Service - Motivated by concern for others, work done for others as an occupation. This is what the Army as a whole is truly about. We suffer and endure so that others can have the opportunities to choose freedom. We work as a team to achieve things that defeat individuals. The Vikings had a saying, "Bare is the back that is brotherless." The Christians have a saying, "Better are two than one, for if one falls, the other can help him up." Both are true in my experience. You are as strong as your battle-buddies are strong. You don't have to like them; this isn't about whether or not someone is worthy of your effort. That worth was given when ya'll raised your hands to join. Honor - Good name, reputation, glory, the dignity accorded to position. Honor your word. I'll tell you, working a job with meaning is addictive. You ARE America's Army. When you're on leave, and don't shave and let yourself look bad - it isn't you alone any more. You are a walking advertisement now, at all times. You are looked at, and judged by, eyes you don't even realize are watching. Especially in a foreign country. Having people come and thank you for serving is an ego boost, but when you're in another country, and everything you do or say MEANS America to a nation, then you realize what an incredible responsibility you bear. There is a reason we are currently the most feared army in the world, the most successful army in the world, the most powerful army in the world. It is the quality of poeple like you, holding the Army's name in high reputation, regardless of how you feel as an individual. Every one of you is a guardian of the Army's reputation and honor - at all times. Integrity - Steadfast adherence to a strict moral or ethical code; the quality of being whole or undivided. Another foundation of a value system. Adhere - to stick through many situations. To realize when you're weak and tempted, that you're going to do the right thing anyway. We are a moral army. The world may fear us because we have great power and they know the temptations inherent in power. The world may love us because we exercise that power, to the best of human ability, morally and ethically. There has never been a year in this century or the last, that we haven't turned away more immigrants applying to come into America than we've had immigrate out. To much of the world, we ARE the land of freedom and opportunity. Personal Courage - The state or quality of mind or spirit that enables one to face danger, fear, or sudden changes with self-possession, confidence, and resolution. It's okay to be afraid -as long as you perform anyway. That's bravery. Confidence comes with training and repeated successful experience. That's why we have a Sergeant's time training program in the Army. Support it! Personal courage is standing up and letting yourself be counted for what is right, regardless of personal consequences. Together, all ten of these words, Loyalty, Ethical, Adaptable, Duty, Enthusiastic, Respect, Selfless Service, Honor, Integrity, and Personal Courage spell LEADERSHIP. Americans soldiers - you- are guardians. A guardian is selfless - doing the hard right for the common good. Here's another tool you've been given, the three General Orders: One. "I will guard everything within the limits of my post, and quit my post only when properly relieved." We Guard. We only quit when relieved so the mission never falters and others can focus on their tasks, not have to wonder about ours. This implies the working of a team. Two. "I will obey my special orders and perform all of my duties in a military manner." We obey. No matter what your rank, no matter what your duty position, in the Army or out, never forget that you are accountable to others. We led, and we obey. We perform. We don't just talk, we do. We just voice complaints, we analyze problems and offer solutions. And we do it in a military manner. Three. "I will report violations of my special orders, emergencies, and anything not covered in my instructions to the Commander of the Relief." We are vigilant to report violations. We don't just walk by, cover-up, or ignore them. We respond to emergencies as a team. We constantly seek to improve for the next person; an unbroken chain of soldiers until the mission is complete. We have a chain of command, in this case the Commander of the Relief - we have recourse when confused, in doubt, or overwhelmed. And again, we are guardians in another Army tool. Our Code of Conduct begins, "I am an American, fighting in the forces which guard my country and our way of life. I am prepared to give my life in their defense. Are you beginning to see how perfectly all these fit together, each echoing and building on the others? Hear the values of Selfless Service and Duty? The Code of Conduct continues, "I will never surrender of my own free will. If in command, I will never surrender the members of my command while they still have the means to resist." Sounds like a refusal to quit one's post to me - General Order #1. Taking care of others. But not throwing lives away unnecessarily - because if you're captured, you can KNOW that the Army will not stop looking until you're recovered one way or another. Have you considered that America loves its people enough to let the entire nation be held hostage for a few? It happened in Iran. Do the few love the nation enough to endure hardship, or sacrifice themselves for the many if needed? As you read on through all six paragraphs of the Code, look for the General Orders and Values in each one. The Army tools are like that - they weave together to make an unbreakable whole. You've learned the Soldier's Creed, and by now should be able to pick out the interplay between all these tools; when you learn the Creed of the NonCommissioned Officer, you'll find these threads in there too. I've covered some tools, now let's revisit the opening story. The Army of One. Now we know that mountain-top soldier is part of something bigger than any individual, the United States Army. An Army of teamwork, of resolution, of values, under orders and obedient to the people of the nation. An NCO with whom I worked once defined the Army of ONE as an acronym. ONE represents Officers, NCOs, and Enlisted, all working together to accomplish the mission and take care of one another. Still remember our soldier on the mountain-top? Realistically she has sweat pouring down her camo'ed face and inside her uniform and is grateful for the breeze. She has burning calves from the climb. She moves quickly across the clearing and secures the other side to ensure the safety of those who follow. And you just know her battle buddy is just out of sight, a roughly ten meter interval, covering her back on every trun of that twisting trail, and ready to help her up if she should slip. There. I've told you a story. I've described some tools you can apply to measure situations and decided on what is right to do. I've given you the LEADERSHIP acronym to remember values, and interwoven those definitions with the General Orders and the Code of Conduct. As an added bonus, I'll leave you with a quote, The Chief of Staff's definition of a soldier: "Our soldiers provide back to America a corps of leaders who have an unmatched work ethic, who have a strong sense of values, who treat others with dignity and respect, who are accustomed to hard work, who are courageous, who thrive on responsibility, who know how to build and motivate teams, and who are positive role models for all around them." Your choice - will you be that type of soldier? If there are no questions, I thank you for your time - and hope learning has taken place in this 'manditory presence' meeting.
  23. good poem - and good questions Zool...
  24. those had a nice beat to them. I don't think I've ever slept so deeply part of me wasn't aware and watching my dream self - which is why I could enjoy my nightmares. I had the anticipation of the reactions when I worked them into the Fantasy world I Game-Mastered...
  25. sounds like unresolved trauma. Heinrich can run from problems and the associated pain, but unfortunately, whereever he goes, he takes himself with him. I have no wisdom or magic solution for Heinrich. I hope he finds the strength to work through his pain.
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