Peredhil

Up front since you'd expressed a concerned over English - A "hart" is a deer, I think you wanted "heart" instead, which is traditionally the seat of emotion. That said, the rest of the English is fine. The way it is written is very well done! The use of alliteration (repeated sounds) builds the emotion and sweeps the reader through what could be difficult passage "stopping points". The feelings expressed are conveyed very well. If you search through the Banquet Hall, you'll find that you are not alone in what you feel or have felt. Every person's pain is unique to them, but you should find understanding, not condemnation. The answer? I can only give you big warm huggles at this point, and tell you that personally I'm very happy you DID survive to come to us at the Pen. Hugs

Hugs Appy I don't pretend to understand your particular pain, but I my heart echoes yours. You know that you always have a place in my inbox. I may not understand, but I always accept and cherish. -Peredhil

Welcome back!

Peredhil ambles by to deliver fruit cake to Melba, the Almost Secretary of the Pen. Listening to the story, he sighs happily. That's just fine! Good job and welcome! Wyvern should be around at some point - if not, we'll send Melba out looking for him. Hugs Melba, Sweet Cherrie, and nods to Door, then wanders on his rounds.

Peredhil bustles about in the Birthday Room, scattering bird seed for the thousands of singing birds as the said birds tune their throats and chords. After checking the anti-bird-poop spells carefully, he straightens his grey raw-silk Armani jacket and steps onto the floor. The room falls silent. Raising his hands, he motions a silent one-two-three count and on the fourth beat thousands of birds' throats swell and throb, in multi-part harmony, the Happy Birthday music. From the highest piping (with a frown he adjusts them a little less shrill) to the lowest swans trumpeting, they swing through the song three times. Perfect...

sure. Send everything to BOTH Ozy and I. Whomever replies first, you're still ahead for round.

As Nyyark pointed out to me, Pirates, as anyone who watches SpongeBob Squarepants knows, can come back and haunt the Ninja as an unkillable ghost...

If you'd like, I've gone all the way through the Riddle Contest. I could PM you the Riddles, and you could send the results to both Ozy and I, and that way you could progress through until RL releases Ozy. Considers the kidnapped Annael, and now Ozy, and sighs.

Peredhil notes that his Lending Booth is still open for those needing Geld...

Dyslexics of the world - UNTIE! But seriously, did you hear about the dyslexics who walked into the bra...

Nuncio listens to the descriptions and the bids, and hesitates before bidding. He hates spedinging the Boss' money, but this would be a good cause. Light in darkness... "I would like to bid 60 geld for this item please."

Peredhil considers the tricksy Lyre, and the wounded spirit within seeking healing. I'll bid 10 for this.

Happy Happy indeed! Envelops her in a big hug. Congrats! -P

Happy Birthday Salinye! Peredhil hugs her gently.

One reason for your being is so I can care about you. Hugs Another is so I can read your works and share your feelings. As to the last line, Sometimes, not at all, absolutely not. It's not the identity the world has given you that matters for your validation, it's the identity God has created inside you as a choice.

"Those who see perfection grade themselves as failing on every attempt, yet those who see the perfectionist only see the misty heights to which they've attained." L. Wilson

Nice. Make sure to post a link in the Library to the comic if it's online. I'd like to read it. Welcome back! Hugs

Oh what a terrible picture of disaster! I feel such guilty pleasure for my laughter. I simply can't help but picture Buster Keaton, Busted keester, Dripping with semi-solid slushy stuff.

Oh THIS could be fun results to read! I can hardly wait, some of these character combinations are just wonderful. For any of my entourage, I'm uber-busy suddenly due to a number of rapidly real-life changing situations. I'd suggest the best way to go would be for the Ladies to write something, PM it to me, I'll tweak any "historical" inaccuracies, PM it back, and we'll see if we agree. If that wouldn't fit your idea, PM me! I'm so flexible I'm twisted. Most of my group are pretty well documented all OVER the Pen. I'd suggest the last set of dates for a good starting point, and for the Bodyguards, Guido and Nuncio, I'd suggest that some insight may be found in the thread Conversations in the Cabaret Room, and in their Rooms in the Mighty Pen Keep, logged in one of the Master Tomes of the Conservatory.

Simple and eloquent. I'm really likin' your stuff.

Well-written and provocative poem. Definitely designed to make those who look at the forms of their beliefs without understanding the contents think twice. Could apply to any religion out there actually, due to the fallen nature of mankind. I'm with Reverie on removing "that". In my limited experience, making something sound accusational immediately puts a reader on the defensive whether it is directed to them or not. Few people feeling accused really want to listen to the lesson. *hugs* -P

True poetry in my opinion has to communicate the heart. I think this is a great start. Quincunx already stated my first suggestion, but you have something here on which you can expand if you wish. Why was the night special? Did you talk? How did that make you feel? Did you dance? How did that feel? The language of the heart is the language common to all of us (except a few sociopaths) - feelings. Feelings is illogical, petty, grand, ruthless, and very filling. They provide the energy to do anything without being constantly exhausted - they are the engine in the human car. But they make a poor driver! Poetry is a way of expressing those feelings in a way that lets others understand and feel an echo of recognition. That means you can't be WRONG about your feelings as long as you're honest. It only means that you can learn HOW to express them better. I'm glad to see you posting. Hugs -P

Politely Pinned.

I held off reading this until you'd posted a few times, because I know your writing by now - it's never enough and I want more. Zool's right. Publish this as a short story in a magazine, if nothing else. Or you could get someone like Ju-Lian of ROMB (Rules of Make Believe) to illustrate it. Her manga style would do this justice I think. -P

Hugs Polite welcomes I think I understand how you feel about all the talent. I still feel the same way. Looking at your works, you shouldn't hesitate to post. For the most part, we're gentle here, even when hacking and slashing a post apart grammatically. Wanders back to his work.